For example: This is a weak thesis statement because the reader can’t decide whether the paper is about marketing on the Internet or Web pages.To revise the thesis, the relationship between the two ideas needs to become more clear. A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about, and will help you keep your paper to a manageable topic.Here are two thesis statements: This is a strong thesis because it takes a stand, and because it's specific.
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Whether you’re writing an argumentative paper, an informative essay, or a compare/contrast statement, you need a thesis.
Without a thesis, your argument falls flat and your information is unfocused.
After reflecting on the topic a little while longer, you decide that what you really want to say about this topic is that something should be done to reduce the amount of sugar these children consume.
You revise your thesis statement to look like this: Because half of all American elementary school children consume nine times the recommended daily allowance of sugar, schools should be required to replace the beverages in soda machines with healthy alternatives.Almost all assignments, no matter how complicated, can be reduced to a single question.Your first step, then, is to distill the assignment into a specific question.Readers need to be able to see that your paper has one main point.If your thesis statement expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse your readers about the subject of your paper.Notice how the thesis answers the question, “What should be done to reduce sugar consumption by children, and who should do it?” When you started thinking about the paper, you may not have had a specific question in mind, but as you became more involved in the topic, your ideas became more specific.For example, if your assignment is, “Write a report to the local school board explaining the potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class,” turn the request into a question like, “What are the potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class?” After you’ve chosen the question your essay will answer, compose one or two complete sentences answering that question.Your thesis changed to reflect your new insights.[Back to top]Remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a subject.For example, if you are writing a paper for a class on fitness, you might be asked to choose a popular weight-loss product to evaluate.